I started a thread called “Atheists coming after me on Amazon” in the Popular Media section. Naturally RPRPsych showed up and tried to push forum members’s buttons by bringing up the little black dress and skating costume business to make it sound like Empress Theresa is a book with sex.
Here’s that entire section from chapter three. Theresa is in college and has been dating Jack………..
Etc etc etc
There’s nothing sexy about that scene.
Theresa is still only seventeen and still exploring her sexuality, BUT SHE GETS STEVE AND HERSELF OUT OF THE ROOM BEFORE THINGS GO TOO FAR.
In the next chapter, Theresa is being taken to what she believes will be her certain death. She thinks about her life………..
So Theresa was a virgin when she married.
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Originally Posted by empther
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The purpose of the black dress and skating costume scene was to show that Theresa was a perfectly normal girl. She has thoughts of sex, as any seventeen year old will, but she resisted the "opportunity" for some very interesting hank-panky. "She kept her honor" ( undertaker in The Godfather )
Under the cirscumstances of this scene, Theresa's actions are understandable. Many girls might do something similar without losing their virtue. Have you ever been down at the beach?
as the book already revealed in chapter one and chapter two,
HAL gives Theresa superhuman strength. She could knock out a gorilla.
She was in no danger with Steve and Jack in her room. She could have easily thrown both of them out the window.
Therefore, she was in no way afraid of what might happen. She was always in full control.
As Steve says many chapters later, "Don't mess around with Empress Theresa!"
Unfortunately, the context makes that paragraph even worse. Before, I just assumed she was in a skating competition and had poor taste in dresses. Now I know better.
This is the first scene you've posted that has personally offended me. I'm 17 and a figure skater- and I've competed multiple times in the same dress, one that just so happens to have a full back, front, loose but full-length sleeves, and a high collar (which, apart from any modesty concerns, are also useful for keeping warm). I can hardly claim to be a shining example of purity, but I can tell you that that whole scene is completely unjustifiable. Is it understandable? Maybe (apart from cutting up a dress on the spot- that's just ridiculous!), but it shows that Theresa has very serious flaws, and little to no respect for Steve and Jack. She's intentionally taunting them, dressing as immodestly as possible, and on top of that, she sees absolutely nothing wrong with her actions.
Is that seriously what you think of us? That's your model for what a Catholic girl should be?
Katniss Everdeen, another seventeen-year-old heroine, would never do something like this. She plays up her romance with Peeta because she's trying to save both their lives, but never intentionally tempts him or flaunts her body at him. Does Katniss have flaws? Yeah, absolutely. She also has halfway sensible priorities, which do not involve using her sexuality to taunt men for the fun of it.
These aren't the actions of a reasonable or moral person. You can call this sort of behavior "exploring her sexuality", but any way you slice it, it's wrong, disrespectful, and unrealistic- again, no girl in her right mind is going to shred her clothes on the spot just to taunt a boy she doesn't care about. Maybe that's harsh criticism, but that's how I feel, and it's how many Catholic girls more faithful than I are going to feel. It's better for you to know about your target audience's reaction from the start.
Oh, of course. Who doesn't? A writer friend of mine had her mystery series optioned by CBS. It never happened, but it certainly gives one reason to dream! In fact, a co-worker at one of my "real world" jobs mentioned that she knew someone who did scouting and casting for film projects set in New Mexico. I'd like to wait until my series is more firmly established before even considering that and all it entails (of course, I mean my mystery series... my YA Catholic series is still in the early stages of being written and published.)
In 1991, my brother-in-law was ordained to the priesthood in Rome by Pope John Paul II. While I'm sure what he's feeling is thousands of times more overwhelming than what I'm feeling, I was privileged to touch the hand of a modern-day saint when my family attended the Holy Father's weekly rosary service.
Whether his blessing that day (over 20 years ago) had any direct bearing on my decision to become a writer, I have decided to dedicate my future endeavors to St. John Paul II and credit him with any success I might have.
Now I just need a St. John Paul II shrine for my writing area and I'll be all set!
Thank you so much for the review. But I am a bit confused. I thought you already read "Nearer the Dawn" and were about to read "Rain from Heaven."
But I'm afraid you're going to find "Dawn" more violent than "Rain." That's because there's a demon involved, and demons aren't gentle. I did try to tone it down (and in fact it is extremely less violent than what a demon would actually do), but . . . well . . . I found myself in the awkward position of having to have violence without wanting to have violence. I tried to keep it from being over the top, but I also had to keep it realistic.
Anyway, hope you enjoy it!
I read the excerpt on amazon for "Nearer the Dawn" and it drew me in quicker than "Rain from Heaven". That's what I'm basing my impression on.
I don't care for gratuitous violence, but if it has a place in the story, I can read it. Your stories have drawn me in thus far and the violence definitely had a place. I do like to warn readers because I know several who have problems with graphic depictions of violence (they barely made it through Therese Heckenkamp's "Frozen Footprints" which isn't nearly as realistic as your writing is!)
Nevertheless, I find your work hard to put down! I want to start "Nearer the Dawn" tomorrow, but I have a long work day and I don't know if I'll be able to start it then stop it for an extended time!
I glanced at the opening chapters of Chasing Liberty.
The situations are alien to anything most people experience. For example, Liberty and friends enter a bomb shelter. I think young adults would find it hard to relate to that. I think they will be lost by page five.
Why not have Liberty and her friends walk through town and show us what the place looks like? Maybe have them do some unimportant activities just to show what kind of lifestyle they have and what kind of personalities they have?
Also, what country is this? How does this society run?
In Empress Theresa, Theresa's life at age ten is described in the first chapter. In chapter two she is in high school. In chapter three she's at Boston College. The action doesn't begin until chapter four, and it isn't until chapter seven that we get a hint about what she is going to do in the story.
Four scathing one star reviews. Reviewers complain about scene vividly describing rape of a child.
We know there are horrors going on in the world. We don't need descriptions of them that might excite the nut cases.
Apparently the book is no longer available for purchase. My compliments to Amazon's judgement.
Book ranks #9,093.836 on Amazon bestseller list.
On the Amazon listing,
author claims the following:
Unfortunately Amazon has allowed defamatory lies about my work in the reviews by people who have never read my book, but who were bullying another user on Google Plus when I intervened. Amazon, despite breaking the law in doing so, has kept the defamatory and illegal reviews.
If that's true, just resubmit the book as a new KINDLE book under another title. Shouldn't take more than one day.
For a thriller book that even an eight year can be allowed to read,
see Empress Theresa.