I glanced at the opening chapters of Chasing Liberty.
The situations are alien to anything most people experience. For example, Liberty and friends enter a bomb shelter. I think young adults would find it hard to relate to that. I think they will be lost by page five.
Why not have Liberty and her friends walk through town and show us what the place looks like? Maybe have them do some unimportant activities just to show what kind of lifestyle they have and what kind of personalities they have?
Also, what country is this? How does this society run?
In Empress Theresa, Theresa's life at age ten is described in the first chapter. In chapter two she is in high school. In chapter three she's at Boston College. The action doesn't begin until chapter four, and it isn't until chapter seven that we get a hint about what she is going to do in the story.
I do have a question- you've stated before that Theresa leaves everybody alone and doesn't attempt to change the political structure of the world after saving it. However, she frees the people of North Korea. Is there a reason why she stops there, rather than challenging other dictatorships?
1. soon after the North Korea episode, an assasin runs a car into Theresa, breaking her back and paralyzing her. So she can't go wandering through the world going after other dictatorships. And, soon after that 200 more HALs appear and infest people. This crisis calls for her full attention.
2. Many people would say North Korea is the worst dictatorship in the world making all others look like vacation resorts. By going after North Korea first, Theresa is serving notice that there is a limit to how much oppression of the people she will tolerate. "Don't push her too far" husband Steve warns.
3. Saudi Arabia is a dictatorship. Women have practically no rights at all. You can't criticize the government.
What if Theresa tried to "liberate" Saudi Arabia?
The people would resist liberation. It's an Islamist state. It's a dictatorship because that's the Islamist culture. Theresa couldn't change things.
4. In the book, Theresa becomes conservative:
A 26 year old Hollywood stuntman, Derek Eames, tries to become rich and famous by breaking Theresa's "world record" fall of eleven miles without a parachute. But he kills himself:
...... Two days Derek’s death Edmund Parker and I made another short video. I said, “When I entered the water the ocean was covered with large waves. I could see them from miles above. My impact on hitting the water would have to vary depending on what part of a wave I hit. I noticed that the man fell in calm water. That was the difference. Somebody making a free fall can’t control which part of a wave he’ll fall on. I suggest that everybody stop trying this insane stunt.
......“Derek Eames died because he tried to play to the wishes of other people. This is why I keep a private life. Derek Eames died because millions of people wanted to see him do this stunt. You all looked forward to his television special. This is the foolishness of the majority. This is why we get idiots elected to high office. I couldn’t have gotten elected town clerk, but God put the whole world in my hands.”
...... Derek Eames was twenty-six. He was a young guy in a hurry to get somewhere. That’s how it always is. The young will take foolish risks.
...... I had just barely survived the very thing Derek was trying to outdo. I learned it’s better to make sure of keeping what you have than risk it all. The young are liberal; they want to change everything. It’s not good if it’s old fashioned, they say. Politicians find it easy to get their votes by promising everything. The old are conservative. They’ve tried everything and sometimes got burned. Keeping with traditions works, they say. The old ways have been tried and found true.
......Mr. Parker was a pretty smart guy. After a year in England I developed an appreciation of English conservatism. They kept many old ways and institutions. Consider the royal family and all the rituals that go with it. What’s that about? I asked Mr. Parker about that. He talked about prejudice as defined two hundred years ago by the English around the time of that complete breakdown of social order, the French Revolution. This was the kind of prejudice intended in Jane Austen’s Pride and Prejudice. Prejudice, as Mr. Parker told me, was not racial prejudice as in the U.S., but a preconceived traditional opinion or attitude about issues whether it was for a proposed idea or against it. It was the wisdom of the species, an easy answer to confusion and emergency, and a steady source of knowledge gained though thousands of years of experiment. It was the capital of nations, he said, superior to individual reason, and made man’s virtue his habit. It was like the Jewish idea of respect for tradition. A fool like Derek Eames wouldn’t understand a word of this.
...... Mr. Parker was turning me into an old fashioned girl. That and my lack of the common problems of people my age would make me respected but not loved. Oh well. It’s better to be yourself than other people’s fantasy.
Theresa is only eighteen, but being responsible for the whole world she thinks deeply.
So she's conservative. She probably would not have voted for Obama.
Of course, the liberal media makes it politically correct to be liberal. "Let's change everything. Why? Who knows! It's change!" And so we get fiascoes like Obamacare.
Theresa would meet continuous criticism if she injected herself into the political arena. She can't be bothered.
Four scathing one star reviews. Reviewers complain about scene vividly describing rape of a child.
We know there are horrors going on in the world. We don't need descriptions of them that might excite the nut cases.
Apparently the book is no longer available for purchase. My compliments to Amazon's judgement.
Book ranks #9,093.836 on Amazon bestseller list.
On the Amazon listing,
author claims the following:
Unfortunately Amazon has allowed defamatory lies about my work in the reviews by people who have never read my book, but who were bullying another user on Google Plus when I intervened. Amazon, despite breaking the law in doing so, has kept the defamatory and illegal reviews.
If that's true, just resubmit the book as a new KINDLE book under another title. Shouldn't take more than one day.
For a thriller book that even an eight year can be allowed to read,
see Empress Theresa.
Just wanted to let you know Rain from Heaven is now avaiable on Amazon Kindle for just $.99. A portion of the profits will be donated to charity.
Here's the description: What would you sacrifice to save the eternal soul of your enemy?
Dellan Whitcom has every reason to hate Eliat Rebysh, the man who has unleashed a deadly virus on the world. It has not only killed Dellan's parents and friends but threatens all of mankind. Rebysh also controls the only vaccine that can save everyone from certain death.
God chooses Dellan to destroy this nefarious evil, and the young man is delighted with the opportunity to exact revenge. But the more he strays from God's path of love, the more Dellan becomes like Rebysh, the object of his hatred. Before it is over, the life of the woman both men love hangs in the balance.
Only by making an extraordinary sacrifice will Dellan be able to destroy Rebysh's evil and free the world from a heinous plot that enslaves the entire population.
Right now I am publishing my works as e-books. Amazon has a self-publishing program and so does Barnes & Noble. These programs do not charge but the downside is that your books will not be in print.
I currently am also looking for a cheap book publisher who will print my works as real printed books. It is quite a struggle.
Amazon does have a paperback print option available through CreateSpace. (See: http://www.createspace.com). It is relatively easy to upload a book, they have a lot of information on doing it, plus a great community where assistance is available.
Hello Marc, I think you have had a wonderful idea here, and hope it can be helpful to many. Perhaps some future topics might be:
1-Finding motivation to keep writing.
2-What are the best writing schedules?
3-Who would you trust to review your manuscripts?
4-Are there are good agents anymore? How to find them?
I've just finished re-reading Ben Franklyn's autobiography (my best guess is I read it a half-century ago--which is the type of thought that can really subdue a person)--and I was pleasantly surprised to rediscover his comments about the value of his group of writers discussing their works, much like this group and also CSLewis' group of Inklings (i encourage members here to check on our Catholic.com Inklings group). Best regards.
I have just completed and published my first Catholic comedy novella titled "The Misadventures of Cardinal Fratelli". It will be one of three books about the good cardinal who always ends up in comical situations.
Here is the plot to the first book of the series
Set in the 19th century, in picturesque Italy, this comic writing follows the daily life and blunders of one Cardinal Angelo Fratelli. He is devout, young, handsome and experiences many trials partly because of his excitability and because of his snobby Aunt Francine.
Suddenly, Michele, a dear, childhood friend, comes around and doesn’t get the hint he is unavailable. Fratelli must hatch a plan to get her married off so she leaves him alone- also while proving himself to parishioners and various, other clergy.
If you would like to see a sample of this work, check out my blog:
While I was teaching middle school in a public school the counselor and I led a group for several years for 13 and 14 year old girls. We called it Brave New Girls. I took great notes and have about 10 chapters ready to go in a workbook designed for young ladies to learn about their faith and to be strong women in our society. Does anyone think ths merits being published? Just wondering....