Feedback on this Valentines "Spiritual" Poem

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This poem basically takes perspective of a human witnessing an angel. The angel is called a “seraphim” to represent the highest choir in heaven. They are so in love with God that they sing “Holy Holy Holy” every minute for the rest of eternity.

Taking that into perspective I’ve recently entered the entertainment industry as a fashion photographer. As a Catholic, a lot of people might see it as contradictory to our faith. I assure you that I only mean to restore modest beauty to the church.

That being said, I wrote this poem to one of my models! Looks can be deceiving because she was so beautiful but she is as kind in her heart as she is on the surface.

Thoughts?

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