[quote="I_R, post:9, topic:270680"]
also, can i ask for your more specific opinion on my video. you know, stuff you like stuff you didnt like
If it were up to me, I would try to mention my main talking points at the beginning, and then try to review those points again at the end in order to cement them in audience's mind. As you review, the audience can better follow you as you present each point to them.
I'd also tighten up the commentary and concentrate on main points. Right now, the review is probably too long for most internet viewers attention spans. It's not really necessary to have a play by play commentary on the video. You just need to give enough of a review to allow the audience to form their own opinions based on the red flags you put up. Take a look at Michael Vorris's videos on Real Catholic TV and take a look at how the company formats their internet broadcasts. Notice how Michael hammers out his points and you have no trouble remembering what was said at the end.
I definitely like your attempts to be witty. That's a good point, but it can be lost on the audience if you come off too cynical. You want to smile more if you can. Videos are much better if they are entertaining as well as informative.
As for the technical side, you definitely have to work on lighting and audio if at all possible. It's definitely something to shoot for even if it's not possible now. The more unprofessional a video appears: the less likely someone's go to sit through it. Make sure you're in the same location or appear to be in the same location whenever you on screen. That can be a little distracting.
You're editing is great, btw.