The abstract of a thesis in theology needs some English

My friend is finishing his seminary thesis in theology. We live in Curitiba, PR, Brazil. He asked for help on translating the abstract, that needs to be written in English. Would someone like to revise my translation?

Title of research: “The Episcopate at Vatican II: an analysis of Chapter III of Lumen Gentium.”

This research aims to analyze Chapter III of Lumen Gentium on its main key concepts: apostolic succession, sacramentality and Episcopal collegiality. It is based on the text of the Dogmatic Constitution De Ecclesia and the authors who worked on the interpretation of this conciliar text. Here you will be able to find a historical overview on the elaboration of Chapter III, in addition to the difficulties of writing it. On the key concepts analysis, we will be looking for the patristic- biblical foundation of each concept, always following the path indicated by the Constitution base text. Here we will analyze the apostolic succession and its implications for the current Episcopate. From this concept it will be given foundations for the divine origin of the Episcopal ministry. Moreover, the stability of the Twelve will be taken as a hint to understand the collegiality. The sacramentality of the Episcopate will also be examined based on the perspective of knowing what were the most significant changes since the Council of Trent to the last Council that aimed to define the issues on the Episcopate. There will be more talk on the Episcopal collegiality because it is a more difficult subject, as well the subject of long and painful discussion during the Second Session of the Council. Following the path indicated by the text itself, it will be seen how this theological element was based. Finally, it will be shown how was the implementation of collegiality in the synodal life of the Church, either through the ecumenical council, either through the institution of Episcopal conferences, that in the post-concilium provoked vigorous debates until the official pronouncement of the Church. It will be shown the various opinions of theologians who argue on the strict pastoral position of conferences, or who argue on the proposition of a wider magisterial scope of it.

Keywords: Episcopate, Lumen Gentium, succession, sacramentality, collegiality, episcopal conferences

For the final part, i.e. “Following the path indicated by the text itself, it will be seen how this theological element was based. Finally, it will be shown how was the implementation of collegiality in the synodal life of the Church, either through the ecumenical council, either through the institution of Episcopal conferences, that in the post-concilium provoked vigorous debates until the official pronouncement of the Church. It will be shown the various opinions of theologians who argue on the strict pastoral position of conferences, or who argue on the proposition of a wider magisterial scope of it,”

I suggest (while aiming to keep changes to an inevitable minimum):

“Following the path indicated by the text itself, it will be shown how this theological element was based. The final subject of discussion will be the implementation of collegiality in the synodal life of the Church, either through the ecumenical council or through the institution of Episcopal Conferences that in the post-concilium provoked vigorous debates until the official pronouncement by the Church took place. There will be visited the diverging opinions of theologians who insist on the strict pastoral position of Conferences, or those who argue in favour of the proposition of a wider magisterial scope to them.”

Thank you for your help!

His academic mentor, Bishop Júlio Endi Akamine, S.A.C., suggested changes in the abstract.

Here is the final text. I think it is OK now.

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This research aims to analyze Chapter III of Lumen Gentium on its main key concepts: apostolic succession, sacramentality and Episcopal collegiality. It is based on the text of the Dogmatic Constitution De Ecclesia and the authors who worked on the interpretation of this conciliar text. It is shown a historical overview on the elaboration of Chapter III, in addition to the difficulties of writing it. On the key concepts analysis, we will be looking for the patristic- biblical foundation of each concept, always following the path indicated by the Constitution base text. It will be analyzed the apostolic succession and its implications for the current Episcopate. From this concept it will be given foundations for the divine origin of the Episcopal ministry and the collegiality from the stability of the Twelve. The sacramentality of the Episcopate will also be examined based on the perspective of knowing what were the most significant changes introduced by the Second Vatican Council in matters relating to the Episcopate. There will be more talk on the Episcopal collegiality because it is a more difficult subject, as well the subject of long discussion during the Second Session of the Council. Following the path indicated by the text itself, it will be shown how this theological element was based. The final subject of discussion will be examining the achievement of collegiality in the synodal life of the Church, through the ecumenical council and through the institution of Episcopal Conferences. These, in the post-concilium period, gave rise to vigorous debates that culminated in the official pronouncement of the Church. There will be visited the diverging theological opinions that insist on the strict pastoral position of Conferences, as also these that argue in favour of the proposition of a wider magisterial scope to them.

Keywords: Episcopate, Lumen Gentium, apostolic succession, episcopal sacramentality, episcopal collegiality, episcopal conferences**

See you. :nerd:

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